Passive smoking brings negative impact for people who do not smoke.
This is a collocation problem for Indonesians translating “..membawa dampak negatif untuk..”
In English the collocation is:
- Passive smoking has a negative impact on people who do not smoke.
Note! s.th./s.o. has + an impact + on + s.th./s.o.
Using the correct collocation will have a very positive impact on your IELTS score for vocabulary in both speaking and writing!
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The growth of cashless payments has raised the debatable issue whether this payment method is part of the problem or part of the solution.
One problem here is that the issue is the growth of cashless payments, while one aspect of the issue is whether or not it is useful. Another problem is that an issue is normally raised by someone.
It would be better to begin with someone raising the issue, and then focus on a specific aspect of the issue:
- In a recent meeting the prime minister raised the issue of the growth of cashless payments. We discussed whether this payment method is part of the problem or part of the solution.
Note this structure: raise the issue + of + [name of issue]
Alternatively you might avoid doing any raising of issues and stick to more standard cause / effect:
- The growth of cashless payments has caused much debate about whether this payment method is part of the problem or part of the solution.
Whatever you decide, note that in English raise collocates strongly with issue. Otherwise it goes together with things like ‘your hand’, ‘the Titanic’ and other items that need to be lifted from a lower position to a higher position. If this is not the meaning of raise that you are trying to communicate then your IELTS score for writing and speaking may go down, rather like the Titanic!
Government must work hard to tackle the problem of inflation.
There are more communicative uses of the word government:
- Government (without ‘the’, without ‘s’)
- Governments (with ‘s’)
- The government (with ‘the’, without ‘s’)
1. Government (without ‘the’, without ‘s’)
Here you are talking about the abstract concept of government, which means the phenomenon whereby an elected minority govern the majority:
- Government is a potentially effective tool to tackle the problem of unemployment.
2. Governments (without ‘the’, with ‘s’)
Here you are talking about all governments, in all countries, everywhere:
- Governments must work hard to tackle the problem of inflation if they want to be competitive in the global market.
3. The government (with ‘the’, without ‘s’)
Here you are usually talking about your government, although you may be talking about a different but specific government that you have already mentioned elsewhere in your text:
- The government must work hard to tackle the problem of inflation in Indonesia.
Note to Indonesians..
Next time you want to translate pemerintah, consider which of these three meanings you want to communicate. If you choose the right one, your meaning will be clear and you will receive a high score for vocabulary (Lexical resource – LR) and a high score for coherence and cohesion (CC), because it will be easier to understand what you are saying or writing.
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Conserving a language is the key to fully grasp the identity of a culture.
Let’s look functionally at what we are trying to communicate in this sentence:
[…something A…] is the key to [..something B..].
OK. So something A is obviously a thing or a behaviour that will help us to achieve something B, which is a thing or a behaviour that is difficult to achieve without something A. If something B is a thing, then it is a noun and not a verb, so we need the noun form of grasp, which is grasping:
- Conserving a language is the key to fully grasping the identity of a culture.
For some reason the expressions the key to and the answer to often lead to this error, so watch out for those! In this structure, ‘to’ is a preposition and not part of the infinitive ‘to + V1’.
The government has just removed fuel subsidies. It means that the price of basic goods will surely go up.
It’s sometimes useful to think of a sentence as having a theme (in this case ‘The government’) and a rheme (‘has just removed fuel subsidies’).
When you want to refer back to the theme, use a pronoun:
- The government has just removed fuel subsidies. They felt that the fuel subsidies were not economically sustainable.
When you want to refer back to the rheme, use ‘this’ or ‘these’:
- The government has just removed fuel subsidies. This means that the price of basic goods will surely go up.
Choosing the right referencing word (‘it’ or ‘this’) will make your writing more coherent (easier to understand). If you are preparing for IELTS, the right choice of referencing word will give you a higher score for coherence and cohesion (see IELTS public band descriptors).
The population of Japan is lower than Thailand.
Here is an example of not ‘comparing like with like’.
In the noun phrase ‘the population of Japan’, ‘population’ is the main noun. ‘Population’, which is a mass of people, is said to be lower than ‘Thailand’, a land mass. This leaves the reader with an image of Thailand hovering up in the air, with the Japanese population some physical distance below it!
A mass of people is not like a land mass. In order to make sure that you’re ‘comparing like with like’, use a parallel structure:
- The population of Japan is lower than the population of Thailand.
This may result in some repetition – ‘the population of’ is used twice. But don’t worry about repetition. At least you’re ‘comparing like with like’.
Repetition can be avoided in this kind of comparative structure by substituting ‘that’ for part of the phrase that you’re trying not to repeat:
- The population of Japan is lower than that of Thailand.
In this example, that replaces the population, but it can be used to replace any noun or noun phrase.
These days children see far too much violence on TV and this can affect to their emotional development.
X affects Y (without ‘to’) / Y is affected by X:
- These days children see far too much violence on TV and this can affect their emotional development.
- These days children’s emotional development can be affected by violence on TV.
Before departing for Australia, students must prepare theirselves in order to avoid culture shock.
..selves. More than one ‘self’. OK, no complaints about that.
..theirselves. Now you’re being inconsistent with your object pronouns.
You guys have no problem producing the following:
- He loves her.
- She loves him.
- Their parents love them.
And you would never write:
- Their parents love their.
- Look at their!
- They say they love each other and I believe their.
So why the sudden switch to possessive ‘their’?! Please use the object pronoun (him, her, them) + ‘self/selves’:
- Before departing for Australia, students must prepare themselves in order to avoid culture shock.
And you might think about some collocation (prepare + s.o./s.th. + for + s.th.):
- Before departing for Australia, students must prepare themselves for culture shock.
Finally, we can assume that the students must prepare themselves and not other people, so strictly speaking themselves is redundant:
- Before departing for Australia, students must prepare for culture shock.
There is a kind of exception to the above rule. Does anybody know what it is? Comments below please!
In addition to smoking, excessive drinking also can cause illness.
Actually the meaning is clear, it’s just not good collocation. Don’t write also can, write can also instead:
- In addition to smoking, excessive drinking can also cause illness.
Indonesians.. Are you translating directly again?! 😉
The government does not concern about the crime rate in cities.
Here concern is used in the form of a verb, but the grammar is not right. It would have been better to use to be along with the adjective form of concern: concerned.
On the one hand you can be concerned about nothing in particular:
- The government is not concerned.
And on the other hand you can (not) to be concerned about a particular thing:
- The government is not concerned about the crime rate in cities.
If something is the object of concern, then remember to use the preposition: concerned about (something).
It’s also possible to say the same thing using concern as a noun, where concern often collocates with another word (in this case, ’cause’):
- The government does not consider the crime rate in cities to be a cause for concern.
And it’s also possible to use the verb form (notice the auxiliary verb ‘to do’ in the construction of the negative!):
- The crime rate in cities does not concern the government.
So which one to use? Adjective? Noun? Verb? Well if you can remember to put __ed onto concern and add about, it’s probably best to use the adjective form!
Tell us about some of the things you’re concerned about. Use the comments box below this post.