The government need to make more of an effort to fight crimes.
Crime can be countable or uncountable, and as with other nouns that behave like this, the uncountable form has a more general meaning and the countable more specific.
Another way to look at this is to notice that fight and crime (without ‘s’) collocate strongly: Continue reading
Population is indeed growing, but after 2050 it will likely to decline slightly.
Another collocation problem. Use one of the following instead and never mind why. Just do it.
- Population is indeed growing, but after 2050 it is likely to decline slightly.
- Population is indeed growing, but after 2050 it will most likely decline slightly.
And make sure you complete the structure with a verb:
- s.th. / s.o. + is likely to + V1
- s.th. / s.o. will most likely + V1
The principle of the social services is that people have rights to live happily and without discrimination.
I know, I know. You mention more than one right. Normally your teacher would be yelling at you to add an ‘s’. But this is a vocabulary/collocation issue.
- The principle of the social services is that people have the right to live happily and without discrimination.
You can think of it as a phrasal verb (Indonesians will be translating berhak untuk..). Sometimes it’s have the right to + V1. Sometimes have a right to + V1.
Try googling “have the right to” and then “have rights to”. Which is more common? Which is the meaning that you want?
People in the 14-17 group of age were most affected by the changes.
I know, this seems to make sense, and your meaning is clear, but if you want a high score for vocabulary you need to use better collocation inside your noun phrases:
- People in the 14-17 age group were most affected by the changes.
The following are all possible. Unfortunately you just have to memorise them. Try to use them as soon as possible in your writing practice and soon they will become automatic.
- a person who is 49 years of age
- a person who is 49 years old
- a person who is 49
- a 49 year-old person
- a 49 year-old
More often in IELTS, ‘person’ is plural (= ‘people’), and so these noun phrases are also possible:
- 49 year-olds
- 49 year-old people
- people in the 50-60 age group
- people aged between 50 and 60
- people aged 50-60
- people (who are) 50-60 years old
Of course we could be more specific about ‘person’ or ‘people’:
- A 49 year-old English teacher
- English teachers in the 49-59 age group
Passive smoking brings negative impact for people who do not smoke.
This is a collocation problem for Indonesians translating “..membawa dampak negatif untuk..”
In English the collocation is:
- Passive smoking has a negative impact on people who do not smoke.
Note! s.th./s.o. has + an impact + on + s.th./s.o.
Using the correct collocation will have a very positive impact on your IELTS score for vocabulary in both speaking and writing!
You can listen to a song featuring ‘impact’ here.
The growth of cashless payments has raised the debatable issue whether this payment method is part of the problem or part of the solution.
One problem here is that the issue is the growth of cashless payments, while one aspect of the issue is whether or not it is useful. Another problem is that an issue is normally raised by someone.
It would be better to begin with someone raising the issue, and then focus on a specific aspect of the issue:
- In a recent meeting the prime minister raised the issue of the growth of cashless payments. We discussed whether this payment method is part of the problem or part of the solution.
Note this structure: raise the issue + of + [name of issue]
Alternatively you might avoid doing any raising of issues and stick to more standard cause / effect:
- The growth of cashless payments has caused much debate about whether this payment method is part of the problem or part of the solution.
Whatever you decide, note that in English raise collocates strongly with issue. Otherwise it goes together with things like ‘your hand’, ‘the Titanic’ and other items that need to be lifted from a lower position to a higher position. If this is not the meaning of raise that you are trying to communicate then your IELTS score for writing and speaking may go down, rather like the Titanic!
In addition to smoking, excessive drinking also can cause illness.
Actually the meaning is clear, it’s just not good collocation. Don’t write also can, write can also instead:
- In addition to smoking, excessive drinking can also cause illness.
Indonesians.. Are you translating directly again?! 😉
It is important to consider the negative effects for the sake of our young generation.
We like ‘for the sake of’, but not ‘our young generation’. It’s grammatically correct but doesn’t feel right. Therefore we probably have a collocation problem.
How about this:
- It is important to consider the negative effects for the sake of future generations.
When you think about it, future generations all start out young, and we would hope that there will be more than one future generation. In academic writing it is also better to avoid personal pronouns, even possessives (‘our’). We therefore recommend the phrase for the sake of future generations.
Because of the recent increase in fuel prices, the price of food is more expensive than before.
This is obviously a direct translation of harganya lebih mahal!
This is really a collocation problem. The IELTS examiner will understand what you mean, but you will not receive a good score for vocabulary. A product or service can be expensive, but the price of the product or service is either high or low. Continue reading
In Australia I will need a lot of budget because I have to buy many things.
First of all budget is countable, and since you’ve written ‘a lot of’, then there should be an ‘s’ on budget. But there’s another problem. Budget has 2 meanings that are potentially useful in this situation: Continue reading