It is important to consider the negative effects for the sake of our young generation.
We like ‘for the sake of’, but not ‘our young generation’. It’s grammatically correct but doesn’t feel right. Therefore we probably have a collocation problem.
How about this:
- It is important to consider the negative effects for the sake of future generations.
When you think about it, future generations all start out young, and we would hope that there will be more than one future generation. In academic writing it is also better to avoid personal pronouns, even possessives (‘our’). We therefore recommend the phrase for the sake of future generations.
First of all it is necessary to consider about unemployment. Unemployment is considered as a serious problem.
This one is a quickie for Indonesians who feel a strong urge to insert ‘tentang’ after consider and ‘sebagai’ after the passive considered.
- First of all it is necessary to consider unemployment.
- Unemployment is considered (to be) a serious problem.
Next time you use consider/considered, consider not using ‘tentang’/’sebagai’!
At the weekend I like to spend my time to cook.
There are two problems here. First of all you are unlikely to spend anybody else’s time other than your own, so ‘my’ is redundant. Secondly, ‘spend time’ is much more commonly followed by _ing (gerund):
- At the weekend I like to spend time cooking.
You can also use a preposition phrase to show where you spend time:
- At the weekend I like to spend time in the kitchen.
And you can even combine these two examples:
- At the weekend I like to spend time in the kitchen cooking.
Now spend some time practicing ‘spend time’!
Domestic work is made easier with the use of dishwasher, vacuum cleaner, and washing machine.
It doesn’t matter which dishwasher, which vacuum cleaner, or which washing machine, they all make domestic work easier, or at least so this claim seems to suggest.
- Domestic work is made easier with the use of dishwashers, vacuum cleaners, and washing machines.
If your claim applies to all of them everywhere, add an ‘s’ to your noun!
These problems have become more serious because of the government have failed to end corruption.
Ok, so there’s a problem here because of ‘because of’!
It should read:
🙂 These problems have become more serious because the government have failed to end corruption.
Just follow this rule:
- because + cause sentence
- because of + cause noun
If you really want to use because of then you might write:
- These problems have become more serious because of the government’s failure to end corruption.
Indonesian students sometimes struggle because they lack of critical thinking skills.
It’s true that ‘lack’ collocates strongly with ‘of’, but only when ‘lack’ is a noun. When ‘lack’ is a verb, there is no ‘of’!
- Indonesian students sometimes struggle because they lack critical thinking skills.
If you really want to use lack of then treat ‘lack’ as a noun:
- A lack of critical thinking skills sometimes causes Indonesian students to struggle.
Once again, in lack of, ‘lack’ is a noun, not a verb!
Past perfect tense needs to be handled with care. It is most useful in the narrative genre and is seldom needed in Task 2 writing. However, Task 1 essays occasionally present an opportunity to use past perfect.
Let’s try an exercise! Follow my instructions carefully and attempt the tasks before reading my sample texts.
- Look at the following graph and attempt to describe it in two short paragraphs. The first paragraph will focus on general trends and will begin:
The second paragraph will describe details and will begin:
When you’re happy with your writing, you can read my sample text.
- Finished writing? OK now take a look at my sample text and analysis.
In general, Facebook had by far the highest number of active users per month, and this number increased by more than 50% during the period. Despite having far fewer users per month, Twitter experienced a similar increase in numbers, but was overtaken half way through the period by Instagram.
In detail, Facebook already had a billion active users in 2012, but by 2015 this figure had increased to more than 1.5 billion. Twitter was in second place until 2014 when the monthly number of active Instagram users began to exceed that of Twitter users, and by 2015 Instagram had taken a 0.1 billion user lead over Twitter, forcing Twitter into third position. Similarly, by 2015 Snapchat had attracted only half as many active users per month as Instagram.
Notice the structural use of past perfect in the detail section. I admit that I went a bit mad with it, but I strongly recommend this structure:
By + past time expression + subject + V3
- Take another look at your own text. Did you use my past perfect structure? If not, can you edit your text so as to include it in at least one sentence? Please share your writing in the comments section!
Even the government has tried hard to control corruption, but bribery is still commonplace.
There are two problems here. First of all ‘even’ at the beginning of a sentence is normally joined by ‘though’: even though (2 words!). The second problem is often experienced by Indonesians trying to translate meskipun..akan tetapi. In English there is no akan tetapi, so no but:
- Even though the government has tried hard to control corruption, bribery is still commonplace.
Notice the position of the comma in this sentence and don’t forget to include it!
Have fun using even though. 🙂
Because of the recent increase in fuel prices, the price of food is more expensive than before.
This is obviously a direct translation of harganya lebih mahal!
This is really a collocation problem. The IELTS examiner will understand what you mean, but you will not receive a good score for vocabulary. A product or service can be expensive, but the price of the product or service is either high or low.
More correct collocation is as follows:
- Because of the recent increase in fuel prices, the price of food is higher than before.
- Because of the recent increase in fuel prices, food is more expensive than before.
Hope that helps!
In Australia I will need a lot of budget because I have to buy many things.
First of all budget is countable, and since you’ve written ‘a lot of’, then there should be an ‘s’ on budget. But there’s another problem. Budget has 2 meanings that are potentially useful in this situation:
1. Budget as a sum of money that has been set aside for a particular purpose:
In Australia I will need a large budget because I have to buy many things.
2. Budget as a document containing a list of items:
In Australia there will be many items on my budget, and so I will need a lot of money.
In both of these examples..
- budget is a singular countable noun
- ‘large’ collocates with budget
- ‘item(s)’ collocates with budget (don’t forget the preposition ‘on’)
- as a singular countable noun, budget requires some kind of determiner (article, possessive, etc.)
Often students who are preparing for IELTS feel they have to do everything to avoid repetition, and so they use budget instead of ‘money’. However, budget is not synonymous with ‘money’. When you’re talking about money and comparing how much things cost, it’s safer to use words like ‘money’, ‘cheap’, ‘expensive’, etc.
Add a comment below and tell us about some of the items on your budget for study in Australia! 🙂