The growth of cashless payments has raised the debatable issue whether this payment method is part of the problem or part of the solution.
One problem here is that the issue is the growth of cashless payments, while one aspect of the issue is whether or not it is useful. Another problem is that an issue is normally raised by someone.
It would be better to begin with someone raising the issue, and then focus on a specific aspect of the issue:
- In a recent meeting the prime minister raised the issue of the growth of cashless payments. We discussed whether this payment method is part of the problem or part of the solution.
Note this structure: raise the issue + of + [name of issue]
Alternatively you might avoid doing any raising of issues and stick to more standard cause / effect:
- The growth of cashless payments has caused much debate about whether this payment method is part of the problem or part of the solution.
Whatever you decide, note that in English raise collocates strongly with issue. Otherwise it goes together with things like ‘your hand’, ‘the Titanic’ and other items that need to be lifted from a lower position to a higher position. If this is not the meaning of raise that you are trying to communicate then your IELTS score for writing and speaking may go down, rather like the Titanic!
Government must work hard to tackle the problem of inflation.
There are more communicative uses of the word government:
- Government (without ‘the’, without ‘s’)
- Governments (with ‘s’)
- The government (with ‘the’, without ‘s’)
1. Government (without ‘the’, without ‘s’)
Here you are talking about the abstract concept of government, which means the phenomenon whereby an elected minority govern the majority:
- Government is a potentially effective tool to tackle the problem of unemployment.
2. Governments (without ‘the’, with ‘s’)
Here you are talking about all governments, in all countries, everywhere:
- Governments must work hard to tackle the problem of inflation if they want to be competitive in the global market.
3. The government (with ‘the’, without ‘s’)
Here you are usually talking about your government, although you may be talking about a different but specific government that you have already mentioned elsewhere in your text:
- The government must work hard to tackle the problem of inflation in Indonesia.
Note to Indonesians..
Next time you want to translate pemerintah, consider which of these three meanings you want to communicate. If you choose the right one, your meaning will be clear and you will receive a high score for vocabulary (Lexical resource – LR) and a high score for coherence and cohesion (CC), because it will be easier to understand what you are saying or writing.
Browse the IELTS public band descriptors.
These days children see far too much violence on TV and this can affect to their emotional development.
X affects Y (without ‘to’) / Y is affected by X:
- These days children see far too much violence on TV and this can affect their emotional development.
- These days children’s emotional development can be affected by violence on TV.
In addition to smoking, excessive drinking also can cause illness.
Actually the meaning is clear, it’s just not good collocation. Don’t write also can, write can also instead:
- In addition to smoking, excessive drinking can also cause illness.
Indonesians.. Are you translating directly again?! 😉
There will be many disadvantages for human if animal testing is stopped.
If we check in a dictionary, we see that human can be an adjective and it can be a noun. In this example human is used as a noun.
If we check again in the dictionary, we see that human is a countable noun. In grammar, we know that if we’re talking about all examples of a thing, everywhere, and the thing is countable, then we must add an ‘s’ to the noun:
- There will be many disadvantages for humans if animal testing is stopped.
Mistakes are often made when human is used as a noun modifier, in which case the ‘s’ might be added to the main noun:
- There will be many disadvantages for human beings if animal testing is stopped.
Can you identify examples of human used as a noun, and human used as a noun modifier? Add them to the comments below :).
In Australia I will need a lot of budget because I have to buy many things.
First of all budget is countable, and since you’ve written ‘a lot of’, then there should be an ‘s’ on budget. But there’s another problem. Budget has 2 meanings that are potentially useful in this situation: Continue reading
Most Indonesian people against the removal of fuel subsidies.
In English, against is a preposition, and so this sentence does not contain a verb and is therefore not a sentence. To make it a sentence, you can do this..
- Most Indonesian people are against the removal of fuel subsidies.
(to be + against)
or (slightly more academic) this..
- Most Indonesian people oppose the removal of fuel subsidies.
or (also academic) this..
- Most Indonesian people object to the removal of fuel subsidies.
Hope that helps!
In Australia there are many women receive the same salary as men.
A common mistake made by Indonesians is to include the ‘introductory subject’ (there is/there are) as well as another subject, before the verb in a sentence.This might be possible in Bahasa Indonesia, but in English you must choose either this:
- In Australia many women receive the same salary as men.
(subject: many women)
- In Australia there are many women who receive the same salary as men.
(subject: there are)
Next time your head is telling you ‘ada..‘, stop and ask yourself whether you really need to use there is/there are. If you already have a subject, don’t use there is/there are!
Unemployment is one of the most serious problems for the society today.
The problem here is that the society (with ‘the’) has quite a different meaning to society (without ‘the’).
If you’re talking about all of humanity as a collective, then you’re probably talking about society. In this case you’re probably thinking about the whole of the human race at a particular time, usually around now. If problems are faced by society (without ‘the’), then they are likely to be problems that all people face, either across an entire country, or possibly all over the world, and so in this case you need:
- Unemployment is one of the most serious problems for society today.
On the other hand if you’re talking about a specific group of people who have some kind of shared set of specific interests then you need the society. For example in this list of academic ‘societies’, group members relate to each other because they share the same academic interests. Similarly, universities often have societies devoted to particular hobbies or interests. In this case you might be writing something like:
- In our university the most popular society is the photographic society. The society has 600 members.
Notice that in this example, not only do we use ‘the’ to show that we are talking about a specific group, but we also use words to modify the word society so that our reader understands exactly which group we’re talking about (‘most popular’, ‘photographic’).
So, be careful next time you use society! And if you’re still not happy with this explanation, and you’re not afraid of distractions, you can check out society in a dictionary. Better still look at some sentences featuring society.
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