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In general, Donald Trump and Hilary Clinton attract by far the highest numbers of Twitter followers, but all candidates enjoyed significant increases in follower numbers during the period. In terms of average retweets per tweet, Bernie Sanders joins Trump and Clinton in the top three. Trump’s Twitter account saw almost twice as many retweets as Sanders’, and more than three times as many as Clinton’s. However, Sanders trumps trump when it comes to retweets per tweet per 1,000 followers.
In general – This is the most concise way to introduce an overview, and remember that an overview is important if you want a good score for Task Achievement. See public band descriptors for Task 1. (back)
attract – This is more sophisticated vocabulary than simply saying ‘have’. (back)
by far – This is a good way to intensify a superlative adjective. (back)
numbers – ‘number’ (without ‘s’) is also possible. However, each candidate has a number of followers, so technically there is more than one ‘number’. (back)
but – In this part of the essay it is often possible, and therefore a good idea, to show comparison and/or contrast. Remember to signal this contrast (here I use ‘but’.). (back)
enjoyed – Again, this is more sophisticated than simply saying ‘had’. (back)
significant – This is a more sophisticated alternative to ‘big’, ‘large’, ‘huge’, etc. (back)
in – The correct preposition after ‘increase(s)’. (back)
during the period – If you have already mentioned the period – July 1 2015-Feb 29 2016 – in your opening statement, then you can use this phrase to refer back to it. (back)
in terms of – This is an extremely useful phrase in Task 1 writing. With this phrase you make clear to the examiner exactly what it is you are talking about. (back)
in the top three – Ranking items is usually possible, and often desirable, in the overview. (back)
saw – More sophisticated than ‘had’. (back)
twice as many – Always look for multiples! (back)
trump – Be careful when you use idioms, but they increase your score for lexical resource (=vocabulary). Take a look in a dictionary at the idiomatic uses of ‘trump’. (back)
when it comes to – An alternative to ‘in terms of’ to make clear exactly what you are talking about. (back)
IELTS Writing Task 1 public band descriptors
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